Ok, here's the submission (this is slide 1 of 3). I can't think of anyway to resolve the wording problem short of redoing the type maybe, but it would lose its spontaneity and I don't think it's too bad. Looks alright on a shirt. As this one wasn't very matched to the typical or identifiable Threadless style, I think for the next one, not only will I really try to work out the concept well, but I'll make a sincere effort to channel the style. I'm not sure if I'm even capable, as I've sat down to work thinking that I would do just that, but it just comes out in my own style despite. Discipline I guess.